考試寫作修改

小改: 針對句子、標點符號、介係詞、冠詞、動詞單複數的用法，調

整名詞大、小寫和單字詞性(形容詞、動詞或名詞)。

大改: 除小改外，並簡化、合併或改寫文句，確保時態、句子對稱，

加上必要轉折、連接詞，並替換恰當字詞。

修改示範

<原文>

Today, older people make up an increasing proportion of our population. This is very clear in the government statistics, that, the inhabitants aged 50 and over has grown in the last 3 decades. It is believed that aged people has a negative effects on society. This will be proven by analyzing one of the ways that retired people spend their money as they are more likely to be providing unpaid care.

<小改>

Today, older people make up an increasing proportion of our population. This is very clear in the from government statistics, that, that the inhabitants aged 50 and over has have grown in over the last 3 three decades. It is believed that aged people has have a negative effects effect on society. This will be proven by analyzing one of the ways that retired people spend their money as they are more likely to be providing unpaid care.

<大改 – 藍色字為建議>

Today, older people make up an increasing proportion share of our the total population. This is very clear in the government statistics, that, Government statistics clearly indicate that the inhabitants men and women aged 50 and over has have grown ________ (加上成長幅度) in over the last 3 three decades. It is believed that aged people the elderly has have a negative effects effect on society. _________ _________________________________________. (那你認為呢?) This will be proven by analyzing one of the ways that retired people spend their money as they are more likely to be providing unpaid care. In following paragraphs I will illustrate how retirees waste their money while enjoying healthcare at the expense of taxpayers.

寫作診斷

• 組織 — 採三、四或五段式寫法(除指考、學測外)? 如何架構各段?

• 連貫 — 從一段到另一段，從一個觀點到另一個的延伸。

• 論述 – 足夠的鋪陳、具說服力? 是否離題? 重複內容?

• 可讀性 — 主、被動語氣、第幾人稱、贅述、長短句交錯的運用。

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