商務寫作常見問題 – 3

商務寫作常見問題 – 3

除了文法正確外,你寫的每一句要帶出你的看法,而非陳述事實或對方已經知道的現況。例如:

問題句-1: We understand that you are not happy about our canceling your order. (僅陳述對方的感受,並未表達對事情的看法或說明)

修改-1:     We have been forced to cancel your order due to unforeseen circumstances of our client. (陳述 + 理由 = 完整表達)

修改-2:    We apologize for canceling you order. This is due to unforeseen circumstances of our client.

問題句-2: As you know, we are a great company, and we have developed great products that make us proud. (僅陳述對方已知道的事,看不出這句真正的用意)

修改:         We have been the leader in the market, but our rival has outperformed us this year. (用事實來突顯問題)

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游志林 -- 英文智庫主編、工研院產經中心英文編修師、東吳大學推廣英語講師、北一區教育資源中心英文作文批改師。