複雜句是高分關鍵嗎?

複雜句是高分關鍵嗎?

今年大學學測即將在1月27、28號兩天登場,在此,除了替准考生加油打氣外,也藉此分享高分寫作技巧。今天先談句型。

不少人認為”複雜句型”是高分的要件。所謂複雜句型就是利用各種子句、連接詞、分詞、片語等,將簡單句擴充為繞來繞去的長句。首先,它不易閱讀,又容易出錯,尤其是中間有時態、用字等問題。

考試時,盡量將複雜句控制在兩句內,中間穿插簡單句。其實,閱卷老師想看到的是有變化的句型,以及連貫的內容,不是整篇令人眼花的複雜句。

下面是一個同學寫一篇關於林書豪的最後兩句:

“…. Graduating from a prestigious university, Jeremy gave up the road to Wall Street, choosing his dream – NBA. With his marvelous story, he is not only the person I admire most but also everyone’s role model, teaching everyone insisting dreams and goals.”

這兩句都有分詞片語,但用法上必沒有正確表達作者的意思。從連貫的角度,第一句中,看不出第二句所提的 ”marvelous” 的地方,少了一句說明他的成名。看下面改寫是否讓意思更完整,句子更通順:

 With an Economics degree from a prestigious university, Jeremy gave up Wall Street and pursued his NBA dream instead. He eventually became one of the fastest-rising stars in NBA history. His success story not just fascinates me but inspires me to stick to my goals. I want to be as successful as he in the future. That explains the reason I take him as my role model.”

你如果對分詞構句沒把握,忘掉它。上面示範的就是簡單,但有變化的句子寫法,每一句都用不同字開頭,結構也不一樣(劃線部分)。而且意思連貫,從兩句便成易讀的五句。

易讀又連貫的句子才是受歡迎的句子。

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游志林 -- 英文智庫主編、工研院產經中心英文編修師、東吳大學推廣英語講師、北一區教育資源中心英文作文批改師。