商務寫作修改

小改: 確保句子、標點符號、語法的正確性,並調整單字詞性(形容

詞、動詞或名詞)。


大改: 小改外,簡化、合併或改寫文句,加上必要轉折、連接詞,

並替換恰當字詞。


修改示範


<原文>


Dear Max Lao,

Due to one of our customers requests an urgent meeting with us on Sept. 3rd, I regret that I must ask you to change our date with you at 11 a.m. on Sept. 3rd.

I am awfully sorry for this late-minute request, but I hope you will be able to meet me at the same time on Sept. 4. If you are not available, will you please let me know by e-mail as soon as possible?

Sincerely,

Benton King

<小改>

Dear Max Lao,

Due to our customers customer’s request for an urgent meeting with us on Sept. 3rd, I regret that I must ask you to change our date with you at 11 a.m. on Sept. 3rd.

I am awfully sorry for this late-minute last-minute request, but I hope you will be able to meet me at the same time on Sept. 4. If you are not available, will you please let me know by e-mail as soon as possible?

Sincerely,

Benton King


寫作診斷


  • 組織 — 第一段拆成兩段,先陳述來信目的,再帶入細節。

  • 連貫 — 佳,很好的連接詞。

  • 說服力 – 提出理由與建議,達到此信目的。

  • 可讀性 — 不錯,但’must,’ ’due to’,以及部份表達仍須調整。


<大改 藍色字為新增>


Dear Mr. Max Lao,

Due to one of our customers requests an urgent meeting with us on Sept. 3rd, I regret to inform you that  I must ask you have to change our date with you at 11 a.m. on Sept. 3rd reschedule our meeting set on September 3 at 11 a.m. for another date.

I am awfully sorry for this late-minute request the last-minute change due to an urgent matter that needs my attention on that date, but I hope you will be able to meet me at the same time on Sept. September 4.

If you are not available, will you please let me know by e-mail as soon as possible? which time and date would suit you.

Looking forward to hearing from you soon.

Sincerely Best regards,

Benton King

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