學校寫作修改

小改: 針對句子、標點符號、語法,調整名詞大、小寫、數字用法和

詞性(形容詞、動詞或名詞)。


大改: 小改外,並簡化、合併或改寫文句,替換恰當字詞。確保時

態、轉折詞、連接詞正確。

修改示範


<讀書計劃其中一段>

I was born in Shanghai China. In Chinese there is an old saying “Study should begin in childhood”, so I took several arts related lessons like piano, drawing and singing when I was a child. Meanwhile, my passion for art is also influenced by my parents because they like to enjoy all kinds of art, they often took me to a concert or a gallery. They also show a lot of interests in antiques and collecting well-made arts crafts such as beautiful oil paintings and Chinese paintings. These make me have a deep connection and love for arts and I particularly prefer to find and appreciate beautiful things. I would love to share with more people about the beauty of arts. Owing to that, I picked my college major as “Arts Administration” in Shanghai Conservatory of Music which is quite a new subject in China and this department of Shanghai Conservatory of Music was established in 2003.

<小改>

I was born in Shanghai, China. In Chinese there is an old saying that Study study should begin in childhood”, so I took several arts art related lessons like piano, drawing and singing when I was a child. Meanwhile, my passion for art is also influenced by my parents because they like to enjoy all kinds of art., they They often took me to a concert or a gallery. They also show a lot of interests in antiques and collecting well-made arts crafts such as beautiful oil paintings and Chinese paintings. These make me have a deep connection and love for arts, and I particularly prefer to find and appreciate beautiful things. I would love to share with more people about the beauty of arts. Owing to that, I picked my college major as in Arts Administration in Shanghai Conservatory of Music, which is quite a new subject field in China, and this department of Shanghai Conservatory of Music was established in 2003.


寫作診斷


  • 組織 — 未離題但過於冗長,建議重整。

  • 連貫 — 不錯,有適當的連接詞、轉折詞。

  • 說服力 – 不夠,建議加上所獲知識、學習心得。

  • 可讀性 — 佳,句型、用字有變化,但問題在時態的不一致。


<大改 藍色字為建議>


I was born in Shanghai, China. I started to take In Chinese there is an old saying “Study should begin in childhood”, so I took several arts related lessons like in piano, drawing and singing when I was a child, thanks in part to Chinese emphasis on head start learning. Meanwhile, my passion for art is was also influenced by my parents. because they like to enjoyed all kinds of art ranging from_______ to _______, and they often took me to a concert or a gallery. They also show a lot of interests in antiques and collecting well-made arts crafts such as beautiful oil paintings and Chinese paintings. These make me have a deep connection and love for arts and I particularly prefer to find and appreciate beautiful things. I would love to share with more people about the beauty of arts. Owing to that, I picked my college major as in My love for art eventually led me to the decision to study arts administration “Arts Administration” in Shanghai Conservatory of Music, which is quite a new subject field in China and this department of Shanghai Conservatory of Music was established in 2003.

價格

大改

小改

申請學校、實習(250字限)

2 元/字

0.5 元/字

一般寫作、報告(150字限)

1.5 元/字

0.5 元/字

履歷、推薦信、自傳(500字限)

2.5 元/字

1.0 元/字

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About the Author

游志林 -- 英文智庫主編、工研院產經中心英文編修師、東吳大學推廣英語講師、北一區教育資源中心英文作文批改師。